{"content":{"sharePage":{"page":0,"digests":[{"id":"60415216","dateCreated":"1349642650","smartDate":"Oct 7, 2012","userCreated":{"username":"juniuswright","url":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/view\/juniuswright","imageUrl":"https:\/\/www.wikispaces.com\/user\/pic\/1226023806\/juniuswright-lg.jpg"},"monitored":false,"locked":false,"links":{"self":"https:\/\/melissa-knapp.wikispaces.com\/share\/view\/60415216"},"dateDigested":1532092565,"startDate":null,"sharedType":"discussion","title":"Mr. Wright's Response","description":"This poem is about a speaker describing the sounds they hear in daily life.<br \/>\n<br \/>\nI was entranced by this poem except for the following lines:<br \/>\nMany things which one encounters,<br \/>\nand <br \/>\nActivating many from their trance-like state.<br \/>\nand<br \/>\nWhile the plenitude of sounds slowly surrounds you.<br \/>\nThese lines &quot;broke the spell&quot; because (in my opinion) they are too abstract.  I did, however, like how they changed the direction of the poem but they did it in a way that was uninteresting.  Perhaps if they were more philosophical?  <br \/>\n<br \/>\nI loved lines such as:<br \/>\nThe soft melodious plodding of bare feet in the dewy grass<br \/>\nYou have many of these lines that are rich and delicious.  nice work!<br \/>\n<br \/>\nWhat if you added more personification?  For example the traffic in <br \/>\nThe distant sound of honking horns,<br \/>\nImpatient in a ceaseless line of traffic<br \/>\nThese lines already begin to play with personification.  <br \/>\nGreat poem.  I look forward to seeing what you do with it next.","replyPages":[{"page":0,"digests":[],"more":0}]}],"more":false},"comments":[]},"http":{"code":200,"status":"OK"},"redirectUrl":null,"javascript":null,"notices":{"warning":[],"error":[],"info":[],"success":[]}}