Memoir # 1 Evaluation
Visually, this six word memoir could be improved. The contrast of the image, isn't incredibly extreme; however, on the upper half it is much lighter than on the bottom half, which has more dark shades such as black, and brown. This makes it more difficult for the actual memoir to stand out, as the color which the writer chose did not stand out in the upper half of the picture. The orange lettering was placed in between a light and dark area (the taxi), which made it very difficult to read and took quite a deal of effort. The lines on each side of the sofa, do not form a shape, but instead, frame the center and main optical point of the picture, the taxi and sofa. I think the picture would look better without the two lines, as it would appear more relaxed, which is the point of the memoir. Typeface and font wise, I think the author did well choosing a font which had no serifs. I think without the serifs, the memoir appears more relaxed and laidback. I think that the tracking was done well as well, because it left enough room in between the group of words, without appearing too empty. The leading was also done well for the most part, as due to there being a lot of space in between the two parts of the memoir, it forced the reader to pause while reading, which helped to communicate the point of the memoir. It also drew attention to the couch, which helped communicate the point of the memoir which was being relaxed. The capitalization of the words was also well done I thought, as the author left "relaxed" uncapitalized. This again reinforces the idea of the author being a very relaxed and laidback character, as he was too relaxed to capitalize his work. There is a widow in the memoir, which is the word relaxed, as it appears by itself on it's own line. Widows are typically a bad thing to have as they draw away the eye from the rest of the work. In the case of this memoir, it does drive the eye away from the rest of the work as the first part of the memoir is so difficult to read. I think that if he had more contrast with the colors of the first part, the widow and leading would have worked a lot better.
Visually, this six word memoir could be improved. The contrast of the image, isn't incredibly extreme; however, on the upper half it is much lighter than on the bottom half, which has more dark shades such as black, and brown. This makes it more difficult for the actual memoir to stand out, as the color which the writer chose did not stand out in the upper half of the picture. The orange lettering was placed in between a light and dark area (the taxi), which made it very difficult to read and took quite a deal of effort. The lines on each side of the sofa, do not form a shape, but instead, frame the center and main optical point of the picture, the taxi and sofa. I think the picture would look better without the two lines, as it would appear more relaxed, which is the point of the memoir. Typeface and font wise, I think the author did well choosing a font which had no serifs. I think without the serifs, the memoir appears more relaxed and laidback. I think that the tracking was done well as well, because it left enough room in between the group of words, without appearing too empty. The leading was also done well for the most part, as due to there being a lot of space in between the two parts of the memoir, it forced the reader to pause while reading, which helped to communicate the point of the memoir. It also drew attention to the couch, which helped communicate the point of the memoir which was being relaxed. The capitalization of the words was also well done I thought, as the author left "relaxed" uncapitalized. This again reinforces the idea of the author being a very relaxed and laidback character, as he was too relaxed to capitalize his work. There is a widow in the memoir, which is the word relaxed, as it appears by itself on it's own line. Widows are typically a bad thing to have as they draw away the eye from the rest of the work. In the case of this memoir, it does drive the eye away from the rest of the work as the first part of the memoir is so difficult to read. I think that if he had more contrast with the colors of the first part, the widow and leading would have worked a lot better.